Revision Memo for “A Walk in the Park”

For my revision my goal was really just to perfect the text I had written.  I didn’t want to mess with it too much for fear that I would mess up my writing.  I took my comments into consideration and decided to leave it as it was.  I received a comment mentioning how the ending was a bit off putting, but considering the story was all leading up to that one point I didn’t want to change it.

A Walk in the Park – Bi-Weekly Rough Draft